A Soul Lost

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frostyfox hat [hat] Posted: 10-26-2009 9:14 PM

I love Aelita's story so check out ... Untitled Story...etc XD too lazy to write all of it

                                                          A Soul Lost

           Chapter 1- The Mystery

                    *Sighz* I have to go school again =_=. I wish I could have more than two friends, Shannon and ME >:(. I feel like we're the weirdest and most different girls of this school. That's 'cause we are not humans but we keep that a secret

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  "WEEEEEE," Shan said because last period just ended and YOU KNOW get home. Well things went different, my mom was home early from detective work and she had a intense look in her crystal sapphire eyes. " I need help." I bet she saw the surprized looks on all of my sister's faces, mine too... She never needed support with her cases! Her powers were fading or the evadence was unbearably hard to understand." I know I never ask but, I need your guys talents to find out about these numerous murders. I've detected the killer is only killing young women such as teens... But there is no trace of how the girls were murdered." I thought about it and thought it was impossible for my mom's abilities not to give a lot of info about it. " Maybe you didnt check EVERYWHERE on the body," my older sis Lita whose a senio atm. Everyone giggled except mom ~ she thought about it... Did she die of a disease ignoring Lita's comment. But she had forgotten that her powers said it was murder or suicide~. It was a breathless moment except that Hito which is a freshman like me that just let out a big burp. XD

Sorry if there was spelling errors and Im pretty crappy in english

TEH PEOPLE -

Mother- idk yet but I will figure out

 

Mizzy ish the kitty who talks a lot XD

Mizzy's friend - Supershannon                

Sister that is a senior- Aelita

Sister that's sophomore- Choco

THESE ARE NOT THE REAL PPL'S AGES THAT I KNOW OF

their just guildies and friends and and and I LOVE POTATOES

wait off the subject XDDD um... if you reconize this story It wasnt copied

just seems like it 0.0 and beginning is always suckish part so dont be mean

also I dont like mystery stories but it has romance in it a lot well gonna be XD

Ill try to be funny o_o                        

                                    RANDOM PIC OF ME 8D IM NOT VAIN XDDD

            

I hope this story ends up in the place I want it to be e.e

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Hito's the brother or friend?
A lil' confusing here.



in progess (:

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Well she is another sis, there's lots of sisters 0.0 I guess I forgot to post her charactor xD woops lol

Shannon should be the friend also theres another friend but Im gonna write it in chapter 2

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Haha, okay no problem :D



in progess (:

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who are you on trickster o_O

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frostyfox:

who are you on trickster o_O

Check out my biography (:



in progess (:

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:D NICE JOB MIZZY!!! i like it, but i dont like being a senior, Id rather be small and hyper XD

Ty for commenting my story and heres a few tips for yours:
Put more spaces so it can be more understandable, I have 20:20 vision and it was straining my eyes and hard to read that when its all squished ><

^^ just a tip, good luck Mizzy :D

Siggy: credit to blushi~^^,color edited by yours truly

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Thx for the info, and xHazel hiya XD

                       Chapter 2-Love  doesn't  cross  my  mind

"Well  I  should  be  heading  off  now," mom  said  as  she  stormed  off.  Choco  went  back  to  her  room  as  she  called  her  bf. " Whose  her  bf  Lita?"  Lita  almost  died  of  laughter...  My  older  sisters  never  tell  me  anything   *pissed off*. They  treat  me  like  piece  of  mad   'cause  my  powers  haven't  shown  up  yet  but  my  mom  said  I'm  just  a  late  bloomer,  I don't  believe  that's  true  though. My  mom  has  magnificent  powers  she  could  touch  one's  hand  or  an  object  and  see  its  past,  present,  and  future.  Lita's  powers  is  telekinesis  and  can  make  objects  out  of  dark  power,  I suppose  dark  because  how  EBIL  SHE  IS. Choco's  powers  are  to  read  people's  minds  but  she  never  does  on  purpose  she  just  slips  in  their  head, also OHH  MY  GAWWSSHH  SHE  CAN  FLY!! Hito's  part  leoppord  and  she  can  transform  to  a  full  blooded  one.  But  we  all  have DNA  mixtures  in  our  bodies. I  am  part  kitty,  Lita  is  part  bunny,  Choco  is  part  bunny too. And  you  know  Hito's  other  part  of  her. Shan  is  also  part  kitty  but  she  has  her  powers  already,  they're  the  ability  of  strength and  has  very  good  stealth.

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I  picked  up  my  cell  and  called  Exo,  a  very  close  friend  but  haven't  seen  him  much  this  year  so  I  don't  count  him  as  a  friend. " Hello, Exo's residence, Exo  speaking." 

"Hey, can  I  come  over  and  use  one  of  your  keys?"

" Eh, sure  anthing  for  you. What  time?"

" 10:30 "

Then  he  paused.  " WHERE  DID  YOU  GO?!!? " I  yelled  almost  feeling  stu 

not finished

 

 

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Um...It sounds pretty good, but may I suggest to not use some internet abbreviations in your story? It wouldn't be that hard to type boyfriend but you know, whatever... ._.

There are some things in life we can't do...And that's why we have the internet.

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Thx for the info XDD I mean I didnt write it out cuz I was soo tired atm

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