Well....I'm starting a fan-made story. I'm sorry if it doesn't make sense, if it doesn't I will change as you would please. But please Please PLEASE, Give me advice to make it better. If you have advice that sounds rude, don't post it please. I'm tired of flame o.o. By the way...The main characters are Eve (My Character, I'll tell you about her later), and the Grand Chase team. If it goes too fast, I'll change that as well.
[Chapter1: New To School]
"Eve...Eve! Wake up! Its time for your first day at school!" Mother said. Eve got up and streched her muscles. "Mom...I think I'm scared. I don't want to meet new people. I'm too shy." Eve said. Eve's mother just looked at her. Eve went off to get ready for her brand new day at Serdin High. "I hope...I meet a lot of kids today." Eve said as she sighed. Her mother called her down,"Honey! Breakfast is ready!" Eve ran downstairs and took a fork and a knife and said,"Yay~ My favorite part of the day! Breakfast!" Her mother set down some waffles and Eve ate them so fast you couldn't even say potato. Eve drank the milk,and she grabbed her backpack and ran over to Serdin High.
"Here...I am..." Eve said."I'd better....um....get over to my homeroom." Eve saw that many people were staring at her, but one person didn't. This boy had white hair, and shining blue eyes. Eve was thinking of why he didn't stare at her like the rest of the kids, so she followed him. "He's in the same class as me?" Eve said as she walked through the door and next to her teacher. "Good morning class! Today, we have a new student. What's your name?" Ms.Howard, the teacher said. Eve froze and started to talk very slowly,"Um...I-I'm....E-Eve...I'm a transfer student f-from...um....Xenia...." Everyone gasped at that. "Your from Xenia!? I'm from Xenia too! I might know you!" The pink-haired girl said. "I'm Amy. That's Ronan over there, Ryan's over there, Lass is right there, Elesis is near me, Arme is in the back, Lire is near Arme, and Jin is hugging my shoes. Get off Jin! Center Stage!" Amy summoned a stage and started to dance. Jin was drooling and when he didn't know it, tons of beams came right towards him. "I'm blasting off Again!!!" Jin shouted. Ms.Howard looked up at the sky and looked at Jin blankly. "Anywhoo. Eve, you can sit next to Lass." Ms.Howards Said. Eve took her place and she constantly looked at Lass. Eve was thinking one thing though....and one thing only,"There's something strange about this guy. It creeps me out. However...I need to make as many friends as possible. I'll talk to him later." Eve smiled as she thought of her thought. She whispered one thing,"I think I'll be happy here..."
Stay tuned for Chapter Two: Don't Shush Me.Make sure to take out your imaginary Lazor and say Pew Pew! (Lol o.o)-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
[Chapter2: Don't Shush Me]
"Now, if you are all defeating Kaze'aze in her castle, how many anmon would you find there?" Ms.Howard said. Eve spoke up. "You would f-find sixty-seven a-anmon." She said. Lass looked over at her and said,"Your pretty smart, for a shy girl. What class are you?" Eve froze and started to speak smoothly to Lass. "I'm actually....um.....A Whipsman..." She said. Elesis had big round eyes and stared at Eve blankly. "Hahaha! Your a whipsman? I could beat you with one hand behind my back!" Elesis said. Lire looked at her with disapproval. "Bad Elesis. A whipsman is stronger than a swordsman. You should know that too. Are you okay Eve? Elesis always has some major difficulties." Lire said. "I-I don't mind w-what she says to m-me.." Eve said extremely shyly. About 3 hours later homeroom was done. Eve was looking at the Blue walls, red stone floor, posters along the wall, and Amy kicking Jin over 9000 times.
"Hey...um...Lass...Can I talk to you real quick?" Eve said. Lass did not look at her, but he did say something. "Yeah. But it has to be really quick. I've got Animal Science class in 5 minutes." Eve looked down to the ground and asked a question,"Would you...um....like to be my friend...?" Lass finally looked at her with serious eyes. He did not know what to say. "Yes...or No?" He thought. "I get it if you don't understand but I really wanna be your friend at all cost possible, but please I'll be a caring friend like all of your other friends, please?" Eve said fast. Lass put his finger on her mouth. "Shush. I'll be your friend." He said. Eve slapped him softly. "Don't shush me. I don't like it when people do that to me. Oh it's time for your class! Go Lass, I'll talk to you tomorrow!" Eve yelled to him. She didn't have anymore classes since she took them all at her homeroom, so she went home. "He's nice to me...I kind of like that...he's caring...I can tell.." Eve said as she walked through the door and went upstairs.
Who said love was golden? Find out in the next chapter: Make-BelieveI also have a tiny story. Check it out:Amy: Ahh...Such a pleasent day. Jin: Hey Amy. Look at my awesome belly.Amy: Wdf. o.o....Jin: I got a 8000 and a half pack yesterday.Amy: B-But...that's.....over 8000......-Scared-
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[Chapter3: Make-Believe]
As Eve went upstairs, she saw Arme in her room. "A-Arme!? H-How d-did you get in m-my room!?" she said. Arme walked over to Eve and said,"Teleportation always works Eve. Anyways, I brought some 'Aren't I cute' cookies. Have some NAO!" Eve grabbed a cookie and bit into it. She almost barfed. "W-What are these made of!? Puke!? These are so disgusting! Get those away from me!" Arme looked down to the ground and teleported to her own home. "Is there something wrong Honey?" Eve's mother said. "Nah. I had a cookie and it tasted bad that's all. The cookie was from my friend, Arme." Eve said. Her mother went back downstairs to watch her drama movies.
(Lass's House)
Lass was watching T.V. and he saw that Serdin High was on the news. The reporter was speaking loud and clear for Lass to hear. "Welcome Bermesiah! Today we have Serdin High, the school that has the last whipsman in the world. The girl's name is Eve. She was once a brave Xeniamite, now she's shy in the land of Bermesiah. Her sister is Raven which will probably come to the school two years from now. If Eve ever dies, there will be no more whipsman in the world. If you know Eve and would like to tell us more about her please contact the local network station. Goodnight Bermesiah." Lass was surprized at the fact Eve was the last whipsman in the four nations. He quickly called Eve and told her all about what happened on the news.
(On The Phone)
Eve: Hello?Lass: Eve it's Lass. Did you watch the news?Eve: Oh....H-Hi Lass...Y-Yes I did....I-It's all t-true...Lass: Make sure you don't die then. Eve: I-I'll m-make sure...Lass: Okay. Goodnight Eve.Eve: Y-Yeah....G-Goodnight Lass....
(Phone has been hung up)
"Wow.....I have to make sure she doesn't die. She actually pretty special. She's okay...for a whipsman." Lass said. A wolf howled...Lass seemed to like it when Ryan howls for him. It's makes him go to sleep quicker. At last he finally went to sleep in his comfertable bed.
(The next Morning at Eve's house)
"Honey! Wake up!" Eve's mother said. She got up out of her bed and slowly walked towards the bathroom to take a shower. As soon as Eve got done with that, she took out a fork and a knife out of her backpack. "May I take this from you?" She said as she started to cook some waffles. "You don't seem like yourself honey. What's wrong?" Eve's mother said. "Well...I don't know if this is make-believe or not but...I like one guy in my class. His name is Lass and he....seems....nice once you get to know him. He's always on the rush though and he can never find time to talk to me. I feel like he's ignoring me." Eve said. The school bus came and she rushed over to her bus.
By the time Eve got to school, Lass was staring at her for the first time ever. She walked over to Lass and sat next to him. "Hi Lass. Want to come to a gathering with Elesis, Lire, Amy, Ronan, Ryan, and Me?" she said. "Yeah sure. I just have to finish one thing first before I go though." He said. "Oh okay. I'll come pick you up at 7:45." Eve said with joy. She and Lass went to their homeroom and sat down in their seats. Elesis and Arme were late, once again. "Your second day of school and your late? Detention girls." Ms.Howard said seriously. "Aw man. Not again." Arme said as she sat down in her seat.
Will Arme and Elesis ever be Early? Will Eve confess her feelings for Lass? Will Jin ever get kicked in the face?! You won't know until Chapter 4: What The Fudge comes out.
[Chapter4: What The Fudge]
Jin flew right down from the sky and you won't believe what he brought home. He brought home a space rock, part of the moon, and a piece of mars. When he landed, he was right under Amy and he was looking at her pink panties. "Jin!!!!!!! Amy Kick!!!!!!!" Amy shouted. She kicked Jin many times and Jin flew right up into the air again. "I'm blasting off...with a hot dog again!" Jin screamed. Lass was looking at everyone except Eve with a souless look in his eyes. Ms.Howard looked up at Jin. "Class, it's time for all of you to....play games!" Ms.Howard said. Eve looked at Lass with a Confused expression. "What she means by playing games is playing tug-o-war. It's to see how strong we have become past these two days."
"Okay...first up is Ronan and Lass. Go!" Ms.Howard said. Lass and Ronan were both equally strong at first and then Lass was tugging on the rope as hard as he could. Then...THUD! Ronan fell to the ground in defeat. "Work harder Ronan." The teacher said. "Amy and Lire!" Amy and Lire both tugged the rope as hard as they could and Amy gave it all of her strength, But Lire caught her weakness. It was getting other's attention. Amy slammed onto the ground. "Train Amy." Ms.Howard said. "Last we have Ryan and Elesis." Elesis was cheering for herself and saw that she already lost. "Pay attention Elesis." The teacher said. Eve had to wait 15 more minutes before she and Lass would walk home together. Those 15 minutes passed when they were having a meeting in the Grand Chase Elite Team Force room. "Dismissed." Knight Master said. Riiinnnngggg....Riiinnnngggg....the bells were sounding. Eve's heart was racing...she thought she could walk home with Lass without getting nervous.
"Lass. I was wondering if you wanted to uh nevermind..."
(At the Party. The song is called Goodbye by Kristina DeBarge.)
"Eve will be singing today!" Amy shouted. Eve got up to the stage and sang her heart out.
Am I supposed to put my life on holdBecause you don't how to act?And you don't know, where your life is goingAm I supposed to be torn apartbroken-hearted, in a corner cryin'?Pardon me if I don't show itI don't care if I never see you againI'll be alrightTake this final piece of advice and get yourself togetherBut either way baby, I'm goneI'm so over it, I've been there and back. Changed all my numbers and just in case your wonderin' I got that new Ima-Single-Girl swag.Got me with my Girls and were singing it (Sing)Na Na Na Na, Na Na Na Na, Hey Hey Hey, Goodbye. Na Na Na Na, Na Na Na Na, Hey Hey Hey, Goodbye.Cut my hair cause it reminded me of youI know you like the long doHad to switch my attitude up (Uh Huh)Thinkin' of changin' up how I rideNo more on the Passenger sideToo bad you missed out on the way I drive itI don't care if I never see you againI'll be alrightTake this final piece of advice and get yourself togetherBut either way baby, I'm goneI'm so over it, I've been there and back. Changed all my numbers and just in case your wonderin' I got that new Ima-Single-Girl swag.Got me with my Girls and were singing it (Sing)Na Na Na Na, Na Na Na Na, Hey Hey Hey, Goodbye. Na Na Na Na, Na Na Na Na, Hey Hey Hey, Goodbye.H-Hey H-HeyH-Hey, Goodbye.I'm so over it, I've been there and back. Changed all my numbers and just in case your wonderin' I got that new Ima-Single-Girl swag.Got me with my Girls and were singing it (Sing)Na Na Na Na, Na Na Na Na, Hey Hey Hey, Goodbye. Na Na Na Na, Na Na Na Na, Hey Hey Hey, Goodbye.Na Na Na Na, Na Na Na Na, Hey Hey Hey, Goodbye. Na Na Na Na, Na Na Na Na, Hey Hey Hey, Goodbye, Goodbye.
Everyone was cheering as loud as they could. Even people from other rooms heard her and started cheering. "Eve, you were awesome!" The Chase team said. Lass ran up and hugged Eve. She was blushing red. "Should I tell him now...?" Eve thought.Will Eve tell Lass about how she feels? Will Jin stop getting kicked by Amy? Will Ryan ever stop being a Tree Hugger!? Find out on Chapter 5: Love. -----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
[Chapter5: Love] Eve: Hey Lass. I'm inviting you to Red Lobster. I'm inviting EVERYONE.....except the random people.Random People: Awww man....TGCEFT (The Grand Chase Elite Force Team): Yahooo!!!!!!!!!Lass: Soo....It's just the TGCEPT? Eve: Yeparoo!(At Red Lobster)
Amy: Oh Lass...Your so cute in your Tuxedo! Kappuchuuuu! -Bites Lass's Neck- (Rosario Vampire FTW)Lass: Amy get off! D<Ronan: Amy. Sit.Amy: Yes Sir......-Hypnotized-Eve: What the....Elesis: -Kisses Lass- Lire: -Kisses Lass- Arme: -Kisses Lass- Eve: You....all.....HOW COULD YOU ACCEPT THAT LASS!? YOUR DATING ELESIS, LIRE, AND ARME AT THE SAME TIME!?Lass: No you don't understand! I'm not dating them...I'm just- Eve: SHUT YUR TRAP. I'm going.....to fight you all.........until you die....Lass: No D:Elesis: You can't beat me. She can't be serious. Lire: Elesis. Remember that she is a whipsman. She's one of the most strongest people on this world.Arme: Yeah Elesis. Elesis: I don't care. I like hard battles. Besides....she can't beat the Princess of Kanavan....can't she?Eve: Oh yeah I can. Watch me.....punk. -Runs towards Elesis- Tornado Whip! (A Big huge Air Tornado goes above Elesis and the whip is inside and the Whip Whips Elesis.)Lire: Elesis!Arme: Red Girl! Why did I just call her Red Girl ._.Elesis: o.o....Eve: Poisoned Sorro-Lire: Harpy Shot!-Eve gets badly injured-Ronan and Amy: Eve! Lire....Elesis.....Arme.....Your done!Elesis: Puh-lease. Like you'll be able to defeat me. Lire: Yeah.Arme: Aren't I cuuute....?Amy: I'm cuter than you Arme. Arme: Oh No she didn't. Stone Curse!Amy: -Dodges- Easy. Ditzy Rush!Lire: Owie D<Ronan: Kanavan Strike! Elesis: -Limping on the ground- You'll pay....I'M TELLING KNIGHT MASTER -Cries-Amy: Okay...? -Helps Eve Up- Finish them. Lass: No!Eve: ...Your just afraid....You're just afraid of someone getting close to you....and then being rejected.....aren't you...?Lass: .....YOUR JUST A NUISANCE! I don't need you! I wish I never met you!Ronan and Amy: -Le Gasp- Lass....Your so mean!!!!!!!!!!!!! D:<Elesis: Hehe~ Eve you sad girl. Lass is mine.Lire and Arme: Elesis, Lass, that was rude. Eve, We are extremely sorry. Eve: I wonder how you guys talk at the same time, and it's the same sentence....Lass: Yeah Elesis. Come on. I have other things to be worried about! Sigh....I thought Eve....was my true love....Eve: Lass. I'd like to tell you one more thing, before I stop talking to you. Lass: What is it?! I'm on a tight list of things-to-do!Eve: I hate you.Lass: Whatever. I hate you too. Get out of my life.
WOW FINALLY. Anyways....Dramatic Question time. Will Eve ever not hate Lass again? Will Lass ever forgive her? WILL JIN EVER RETURN TO THIS STORY!? Find out next time....on A Hopeless Romance. Oh Yeahz....I gotz anuther storie for you guyz. Lass: I HATE YOU ELESIS!Elesis: I love chu tewz! -Hugs Lass- Lass: HALP MEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!
-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------[Chapter 6: Hatred] (Old Format Yayyyyy~)Lass looked at Eve in a way Lire could not imagine. He thought Eve and him could be enemies. Eve looked pale in the face. She was looking at Lass with hatred in her deep dark blue eyes. "I trusted you. Freak." Eve said quietly as she left the the building. Lass didn't feel sorry for one moment right after what she said to him. Lire and Elesis came to comfort him. Arme just stared at Ronan. Amy was dancing up on the table, Jin came flying down. "Sorry Lass, I have to go talk to Eve." Lire said politely. Lass nodded and Elesis glared at Lire.As Lire came out of the building, she saw Eve sitting on the steps in the rain. Lire pulled out an umbrella and held it over Eve's head. "I'm sorry Eve. I didn't mean to do that. I-I didn't know what happened to me. I'm extremely sorry. I'll be your best friend from now on." Lire apologized. Eve looked at her and looked back at the ground. "It's okay...I'm just furious at Lass. Elesis is a jerk, and Arme thinks she's cute but she's not." Eve complained. "I'm hungry. Still." "Let's go get you a steak then." Lire said as Eve and her walked to the Steakhouse.
Lass ran out of the door with Elesis, Ronan and Arme right behind them, and Jin eating while running. Ronan looked everywhere for Eve and IT happened. His Fan girls ran towards him. "Wait...How come I don't have fan girls!?" Lass said. "Because your ugly." Ronan said. "You must be kidding me. Look at this gorgeous face. I'm beautiful." Lass said to Ronan. Amy ran towards them and slapped the boys and scolded them. Ryan was running right to Amy and accidentally bumped into her. "I'm going home." Amy said "I am too!" Ronan said while screaming for his life "Yeah....So am I." Lass whispered. Jin and Ryan just wanted to stay with Arme and Elesis. Eve and Lire had a great time when they were eating at the Steakhouse, so Lire sleptover. All they did was girly stuff like Truth or Dare Girl Style, Manicures, Pedicures, and much more. Someone knocked on Eve's door. "Coming!" Eve said as she answered the door. A Ghostly figure came to greet Eve for he was the new neighbor. "Hello. I'm Roy. I came to say that I'm new to town and going to Serdin High." Roy said kindly. "Oh...Hi! I'm Eve. That's Lire over there.Come right in!" Eve said back to him. Lire looked at Roy and nodded with a Smile on her face. Roy just looked at Lire with a rude and scary look. Lire thought again about Roy. She thought he was a nice neighbor for Eve, but now she realizes wrong. Will Lire ever think third thoughts about Roy? Will Eve hate Lass forever? Will I ever stop doing dramatic Questions!?!?!?! Find out next time on A Hopeless Romance.-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------[Chapter 7: Roy] "Would you like a batch of cookies Roy? I make the best cookies ever." Eve said politely. "I would love some." Roy said as Eve left towards the kitchen. Roy looked at Lire and Lire looked at him. They quickly looked furious at each other. "You come near Eve and your dead. She's my future soulmate. I won't let anyone touch her. Not even a flithy Elf like you. I'll have my Katana touch your neck only if you anger her or touch her. I'll give this speech to everyone at the school if you think you can do something about it. I automatically hate someone who isn't Eve." Roy told her rudely. Lire just looked at him once and started to talk to him. "Well...Who said I was going to love Eve like a Soulmate? I love her as a friend. Nothing more. Why are you threatening me? Your just a rude person who always wants something." Lire replied back. Eve came in with the cookies she made for Roy. Then the phone rings. Lire and Eve were debating who should pick it up. Roy just eats his cookies as Lire picks up the phone. [On the Phone.]"Hello? It's Lass." Lass says on the phone. Lire gets all worked up just because Lass is calling. She replies with a calm voice. "Hello Lass, It's Lire. What do you need?" Lire says. "Well I needed Eve for something. But now I know that she'll just come to my house and punch me in the mouth." Lass says as he hangs up the phone. [Call Ends.] "It was Lass. He was going to use you for something but he thought you were going to come to his house and punch him in the mouth." Lire said to Eve. Roy looked at Lire stating that him and Eve should be alone at the time, so Lire left the house. Roy looked at Eve and she looked at him. Leaning Closer....and Closer....Until they bump their heads into each other. "Oh Sorry. I didn't mean to do that to you." They both say at the same time as they both are gazing into each other eyes.
Over at Lass' house, Lass watches TV. He turns the channel just to come up to the News. "Eve's Sister, Raven, will be going to a different High School in Ellia. Also we have a-" The News Reporter stopped in his sentence as Lass turned off the TV. "I hate her. She'll be an enemy to me. Forever and ever. What I just hope is that Roy doesn't come to town." Lass said to himself.
Again at Eve's house, Roy keeps moving closer to Eve. "Excuse me. I need to....um.....do something." Eve said as she ran upstairs. "What is he trying to do to me...What am I doing...Am I being control into forcing to kiss him?" Eve struggled to not think that. "No...Stop thinking about him...I can't stop!" Eve said as she fell to the floor.
What happened to Eve? Is Roy forcing her to kiss him? How do I know!? I don't. But whatever....Find out next time on a Hopeless Romance.-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
IGN: JadeYuuki
The Jin thing made me laugh.
Anyway, you should use "she" instead of repeating so much the character's name.
Also, you might wan't to describe the sorrundigs a bit more (the school was like this or that) so people can visualize the settings.
Other than that I like it~ hope more people do.
By Rokuna~
Omg Yay! I'm happy.
I like it. My favorite is Jin XD
I'm extremely happy that people loved the 1st chapter. The 2nd chapter will be funny as well so watch out. Grawr!
Nice story jade. xD Hurry up with chapter 5!